Kia ora here is my week writing called a walk to remember.
I am going to share my whole writing and my task 4.
I enjoyed this writing because I had fun writing funny parts in my story I am also really proud.
Task 4:
Slowly, I shuffled my feet towards the endless track while I had a good grip on my cane.
Stunned, my heart was racing while I stared around, wondering if this was real?
My writing:
At sunset, the wind was howling really hard so the tall trees fell over on the dirty brown dirt. Like a sponge absorbing water, the storm kept on getting bigger.
Isaac sat on his comfy couch so he could play his video game.
“What is this? I never heard of this level,” questioned Isaac. “But it looks interesting,” he declared, “Max!”
“What?” asked Isaac’s older brother Max. “What would be more important than my homework?” as he had his work in his hands.
“I don’t know? But anyways, have you ever played this level, because I have never heard of it.”
“Hmm let me see,” responded Max. “Oh my gosh! There is literally a new sticker on the level, ugh.”
“Okey dokey mokey pokey.”
“Now let me get back to my work,” announced Max.
Rumble, rumble, as the ground slowly separated, making a hole into a dark foggy place.
“This is cool and amazing, I wonder what is in there?.”
Isaac’s character cautiously tiptoed down the hole, he tried to make the character go faster but it automatically made him walk slow.
“Agh, hurry up,” he commanded. “It’s getting to the best part,” argued Isaac.
Few minutes passed, while Isaac was waiting he was stuffing his face with chips.
Isaac’s character finally made it at the bottom of the hole.
“Yes, finally,” he shouted.
Isaac’s face had a big smile then it became a frown.
“WHAT NOW IT’S LOADING, WHAT IS UP WITH THIS GAME,” yelled Isaac.
“Keep your voice down,” Isaac’s mother replied.
“I’m trying to work here,” Max also replied.
“Me too, I’m on a meeting,” said Isaac’s dad.
“Okey dokey mokey pokey.”
Here is the image I am writing about:
Was there anything that could make my writing better?