nin hao,
this is my weeks writing The Witches. We have been practicing FANBOYS and making a simple sentence into a descriptive sentence also making similes.
Here is a simple sentence:
The witches went through the air. They held onto the brooms. Their skin was green.
Here is my sentence that I made better:
The mysterious witches went swiftly through the colourful dark air. They held loosely onto their brooms because of their warts on their hands. Their yucky gross skin was disgusting because it was green.
Here is a simile I have made:
Black smoke trailed behind their broomsticks like a tracker.
Here is my sentence describing the scene:
The witches flew across the colourful sky which is dark with bats squeaking in the background like an emergency siren.
Here is the picture:
Do you ever feel scared when you are around a scary house?